[Internal-cg] Proposal for final review

[Lynn St.Amour]

Alissa, Jennifer, secretariat,

thank YOU.

Great job everyone.

Lynn

On Oct 29, 2015, at 3:24 AM, Alissa Cooper <alissa at cooperw.in> wrote:

> All,
> 
> Thanks for your edits. The attached version incorporates them as follows:
> 
> - Accepted Wolf-Ulrich’s edits. I added a footnote to the IANAPLAN proposal, paragraph 3004, that reads “This draft is being held for publication in the RFC Editor’s queue.”
> 
> - Accepted most of Milton’s edits, or made the edits with minor modifications. Exceptions: para 50 (language is taken directly from CWG proposal), para 56 (potentially substantive change in the characterization that would require further discussion - agree with Manal that this is accurate as-is).
> 
> - Accepted Paul’s edits, or made the edits with minor modifications. Re para X016 - I deleted the final sentence. We previously had a comment from Daniel asking if it could be removed, and I also found it vague and that it doesn’t really flow from the previous sentences, even with Lynn’s improvements.
> 
> - Accepted Lynn’s edits.
> 
> - Accepted Manal’s edits.
> 
> - Accepted Mary’s edits.
> 
> - Joe: I accepted Milton’s edit to para 98, which others seemed to support, so this should resolve the issue you mentioned.
> 
> Jennifer will produce a clean version for publication on our site today.
> 
> Thanks all!
> Alissa
> 
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