[Internal-cg] Proposal for final review

[Manal Ismail]

Thanks Alissa, secretariat and everyone ..
Please find attached a couple of minor comments marked in track changes .. Nothing substantial:
-	Comment on page 6 para X016
-	If ok, same comment applies on page 14 para 27
-	Reply to Milton’s comment on page 21 para 56 
-	Typo on page 24

Kind Regards
--Manal

-----Original Message-----
From: Internal-cg [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at ianacg.org] On Behalf Of Paul Wilson
Sent: Wednesday, October 28, 2015 5:34 AM
To: Alissa Cooper
Cc: IANA etc etc Coordination Group
Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Proposal for final review

Here’s a few small changes to the Exec Summary section, in addition to Milton’s.

I have one question, about the last sentence in X016, which I really cannot follow.

Paul.



On 27 Oct 2015, at 3:18, Alissa Cooper wrote:

> Please find attached a redlined and clean copy of the proposal reflected all changes agreed at the F2F. There are still a few spacing and footnote numbering issues to be worked out once the secretariat produces the PDF but otherwise this is the version intended for publication with our agreed status update announcement on October 29.
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> If you see any errors in this version, please make them known on the mailing list by 23:59 UTC on October 28.
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> Thanks,
> Alissa
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