[Internal-cg] Draft webinar deck and outline

Paul Wilson pwilson at apnic.net
Mon Jul 27 01:01:13 UTC 2015


I agree this presentation looks very good.

A few more comments:

- There is an inconsistency in labels used for “Protocol Parameters”
e.g.
Slide 3: “Protocol Database”
Slide 6: “Protocol”
Slide 28: “Parameters Functions”

- It is good to have the slides covering “What are the IANA functions 
related to X” at the start of each section, but there is an 
inconsistency in the way this information is presented.  Slides 9 and 10 
work well to illustrate the domain of the Names functions and then the 
“flow of control”, but this format is not repeated for Numbers and 
Protocols.

For Numbers I suggest to replace slide 18 with 2 slides: first to 
explain the numbers resources as IPv4, IPv6 and ASNs; and then to show 
the “flow” of allocations of IP and ASN blocks to the RIRs.  For 
Protocol Parameters, Slide 24 could be split and explained in a similar 
way.

I also note that the label referring to “IANA Customers” appears in 
slide 3 and then again in slide 10, but never again after that.  I 
suggest that while the general reference is OK on Slide 3, it should 
become something more specific when it comes to explaining the customers 
of the 3 communities - i.e. TLD Registries, RIRs, and IETF respectively.

- The inclusion of Slides 15 and 16 in the Names section could be 
confusing.  It is there not because CCWG is specific to names, but 
because of the dependency of the CWG proposal on that accountability 
result.  Even though this would be explained by the presenter, I think 
it needs to be clearer in the slides to avoid confusion. For instance, 
with an explanatory slide before current Slide 15.

- I like the use of different colours for the different communities; but 
i observe that the difference is quite subtle and might not be well 
resolved by all viewers and even by all displays/projectors.  I would 
suggest to adjust those colours to make them more distinct (also not to 
use blue for the Protocol Parameters since it does not stand out from 
the overall blue theme of the presentation).

That’s all for now,

Paul.



On 25 Jul 2015, at 5:52, Alissa Cooper wrote:

> Attached are a draft slide deck and outline for the webinars planned 
> for the public comment launch. The deck was prepared by XPLANE, a 
> design firm that ICANN works with, with input from the ICG comms WG 
> and comms folks from the OCs. We haven’t confirmed dates/times of 
> the webinars but will do so soon. In the meantime please check the 
> deck for accuracy and send your comments to the list.
>
> Jennifer, please put these documents in Dropbox.
>
> Thanks,
> Alissa
>
>
> [XPL_1510_ICG_Report_Visual_Summary_03e.pdf]
>
> [public-comment-webinar-outline-v1.docx]
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