[Internal-cg] X009 wording

[Alan Barrett]

I find the way paragraph X009 jumps right in to “Under the combined proposal …”, without explaining who did the combining, to be confusing.   I suggest adding the following text to clarify the process that led to the decision:

The numbers and protocol parameters communities have confirmed that they have no objection to ICANN subcontracting their parts of the IANA functions to PTI.  Accordingly, the combined proposal places all parts of the IANA functions (names, numbers, and protocol parameters) under PTI.

With a small edit to the current opening sentence, the entire paragraph would then read:

OLD: Under the combined transition proposal the administrative staff and related resources, processes, data, and know-how associated with all of the IANA functions currently covered by the NTIA contract would be legally transferred to PTI. ICANN would contract with the PTI for the performance of the naming functions. The IETF would maintain its existing Memorandum of Understanding with ICANN for the performance of the protocol parameters functions. The RIRs would establish a Service Level Agreement with ICANN for the performance of the numbering functions. ICANN would sub-contract the performance of the protocol parameters and numbering functions to PTI. Each of the three operational communities would maintain independent authority over its own processes for performance review and for considering a change of IANA Functions Operator for the functions within their purview. All three communities have explicitly committed to coordinate with each other and ICANN to ensure the stability and smooth operation of the IANA functions in the event of such a change.

NEW(1):  The numbers and protocol parameters communities have confirmed that they have no objection to ICANN subcontracting their parts of the IANA functions to PTI.  Accordingly, the combined proposal places all parts of the IANA functions (names, numbers, and protocol parameters) under PTI. The administrative staff and related resources, processes, data, and know-how associated with all of the IANA functions currently covered by the NTIA contract would be legally transferred to PTI. ICANN would contract with the PTI for the performance of the naming functions. The IETF would maintain its existing Memorandum of Understanding with ICANN for the performance of the protocol parameters functions. The RIRs would establish a Service Level Agreement with ICANN for the performance of the numbering functions. ICANN would sub-contract the performance of the protocol parameters and numbering functions to PTI. Each of the three operational communities would maintain independent authority over its own processes for performance review and for considering a change of IANA Functions Operator for the functions within their purview. All three communities have explicitly committed to coordinate with each other and ICANN to ensure the stability and smooth operation of the IANA functions in the event of such a change.

With a larger edit to the current opening sentence (removing any mention of staff), the result could be:

NEW(2):  The numbers and protocol parameters communities have confirmed that they have no objection to ICANN subcontracting their parts of the IANA functions to PTI.  Accordingly, the combined proposal places all parts of the IANA functions (names, numbers, and protocol parameters) under PTI. Appropriate resources would be transferred from ICANN to PTI. ICANN would contract with the PTI for the performance of the naming functions. The IETF would maintain its existing Memorandum of Understanding with ICANN for the performance of the protocol parameters functions. The RIRs would establish a Service Level Agreement with ICANN for the performance of the numbering functions. ICANN would sub-contract the performance of the protocol parameters and numbering functions to PTI. Each of the three operational communities would maintain independent authority over its own processes for performance review and for considering a change of IANA Functions Operator for the functions within their purview. All three communities have explicitly committed to coordinate with each other and ICANN to ensure the stability and smooth operation of the IANA functions in the event of such a change.

Alan Barrett