[Internal-cg] Removing public comment mentions in the executive summary

[Alissa Cooper]

Hi Jean-Jacques,

My issue with this suggestion is that it is true for basically every point in the executive summary. Everything we say here is further elaborated somewhere in the proposal. I’d rather not add a single link arbitrarily or links for each point made there.

Alissa

> On Oct 19, 2015, at 7:31 AM, Subrenat, Jean-Jacques <jjs at dyalog.net> wrote:
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> Alissa,
> as indicated in a previous email, I agree with this first indication about Public Comments, and suggested that at the end of your proposed text in X005, you insert a link.
> Thanks.
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> De: "Narelle Clark" <narelle.clark at accan.org.au>
> À: "Alissa Cooper" <alissa at cooperw.in>, "IANA etc etc Coordination Group" <internal-cg at ianacg.org>
> Envoyé: Lundi 19 Octobre 2015 07:22:17
> Objet: Re: [Internal-cg] Removing public comment mentions in	the	executive	summary
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> I agree with keeping these items in the executive summary as that is what they are doing: summarising the activity. 
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> From: Internal-cg [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at ianacg.org] On Behalf Of Alissa Cooper 
> Sent: 18 October 2015 12:25 
> To: IANA etc etc Coordination Group 
> Subject: [Internal-cg] Removing public comment mentions in the executive summary 
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> I am going through to remove the mentions of the public comments in the executive summary. I have questions about two paragraphs that mention the public comments and whether we’re sure we want to remove them. The first is X005: 
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> "X005 The ICG sought public comment on the combined proposal and the final version presented here reflects comments received. The ICG received 157 comments on the combined proposal from a wide variety of stakeholders, including individuals, operational communities, supporting organizations and advisory committees, businesses and trade associations, civil society groups, governments, and others from all regions of the world." 
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> It strikes me that this is useful in the executive summary for those who may not read the full proposal, so they know that the public had an opportunity to comment. 
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> The other is X025, which is part of our assessment of whether the proposal has broad community support: 
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> "X025 The majority of commenters who submitted comments during the public comment period support the proposal. These commenters included individuals, operational communities, supporting organizations and advisory committees within the ICANN community, businesses and trade associations, civil society organizations, governments, and others from across all regions of the world. Thus community support for the combined proposal is broad both in diversity of interests and geography of origin. Furthermore, the consensus of the ICG in support of the proposal provides a powerful demonstration of the breadth of community support." 
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> In this case the public comments are a core basis of our conclusion here, so I was wondering whether we could leave this in the executive summary. 
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> Alissa 
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