[Internal-cg] Running list of slide deck edits

[Alissa Cooper]

I’ve gathered below the running list of slide deck edits. The cutoff for feedback on the deck is 20:00 UTC today. I have responded to all the emails about this in the other thread. Paul, Joe, Martin — please have a look over there as there are outstanding questions arising from your comments.

I will also include a note to the designers about strengthening and unifying the color usage in the deck per Alan/Russ Mundy.

Slide 3:
- Change "make change requests" to "submit requests"

- For the "talk boxes" that sit above the text that says "IANA customers make change requests," it would be better if there were only three talk boxes and if they were color-coded using the group colors, one in each color.

- It's not obvious that the devices at the bottom of the slide belong to users out on the Internet. It would help to either depict that graphically (maybe with little people using the devices or near the device?) or add the term "Internet users" somewhere around the bottom of the slide to make it more clear that what is being shown is the use of IANA values in software on regular Internet users' devices.

Slide 4:
- Add a legend that expands the acronyms NTIA, IANA, and ICANN

Slide 5:
- Change "Maintain the security, stability, and resiliency of the Internet DNS" to "Maintain the security, stability, and resiliency of the Internet Domain Name System (DNS)"

Slide 6:
- Change "Protocol" to "Protocol Parameters"

- Strike all three instances of the word “Database.” So the labels would just be “Names,” “Numbers” and “Protocol Parameters.”

- Expand the acronym "ICG" on first use.

- Make the whole timeline black rather than changing colors in 2015.

- Add the following text to the bottom of the slide with an arrow from left to right under or behind the text: “Ongoing secure, stable, and resilient IANA functions”

Slide 10:
- Change "IANA customers make change requests" to “Names community members submit requests”

- Change the word "Database" to "DNS Root Zone and WHOIS"

Add a new slide between slides 10 and 11 as follows:

Title:  
What are the IANA functions related to names?

Bulleted list:
Root Zone Change Request Management

Root Zone WHOIS Change Request Management

Delegation and Redelegation of TLDs

Root DNSSEC Key Management

Management of Repository of IDN Practices

Other Root Zone related activities

Slide 13:
- Replace the text below "MISSION" with the following: "Established to monitor the performance of the IANA naming functions and escalate non-remediated issues."

Slide 15: 
- Add a box with the following text below the CSC box:

“Empowerment of the Special IFR to determine that a separation process is necessary” 

with “separation process” in bold

Slide 18:
- Change "IP and AS Numbers to the Regional Internet Registries" to "Internet Protocol (IP) and Autonomous System (AS) Numbers to the Regional Internet Registries (RIRs)"

Slide 19:
- Delete the two asterisks

Slide 24:
- Some folks find it hard to read the white text on the blue background. Could the text color be changed in the blue boxes?

Slide 26:
- Could we add a visualization that shows the community expectations being added on to the existing MoU and SLAs?

Slide 28: 
- Change "vmetrics" to "metrics”.

- Change title to “Oversight components in the combined proposal”

- Add this sentence to the bottom of the slide: "Operational interactions between the communities and the IANA functions operator are not pictured."