[Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5

[Manal Ismail]

Many thanks Lynn for the suggested edits and for your comments ..
Following your email, I would also urge colleagues to review and provide feedback by Friday in order to meet our public comment period dates .. 

Meanwhile, for the sake of time, maybe the secretariat could kindly assist in inserting the suggested link(s)/footnote(s) (criteria against which the ICG assessed the proposals, individually and collectively) and graph (showing the % of IANA transactions (for 2014) per area) ..

I also believe we need to conclude on the order of the proposals .. Although it is not a substantial change it would still require a thorough review and several edits throughout the document (ICG report, sections' headers, ...) ..

I had a few questions throughout the report and hope colleagues would review and provide further guidance ..

Finally, some parts of the text (highlighted in blue to my best) reflect the current status of the accountability proposal (ongoing discussions) which won't be the case (accountability proposal finalized and put out for public comments too) by the time the combined transition proposal is out for public comment .. Should such parts be changed to reflect the status of the accountability proposal at the time of the public comment period?

Looking forward to receiving your input/feedback/suggestions/comments ..

Kind Regards
--Manal

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From: Internal-cg [mailto:internal-cg-bounces at ianacg.org] On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour
Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 6:54 PM
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Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5

Again, thanks much Manal,

To-date, I reviewed this through the ICG report section (only), and made some edits to try and convey why the report was combined in this way.  I would appreciate it if folks could review it carefully, as I believe it is a critical point (and sensitive).  And, some of it may be better suited to the Exec. Summary.  

Joe, I believe you had volunteered to send some draft text re the Exec. summary.  If this is correct, can I do anything to help?  If I have it wrong, I will look up the minutes (can't do that just now though, unfortunately).

And, could those individuals who have been participating in the CWG - Stewardship and the CCWG efforts, please review the appropriate sections to ensure they reflect the latest positions?

Finally, we should aim to have  all comments on this and the public web-site no later than this Friday, so that we can review the "very near final" drafts of this on Monday, in order to meet our public comment period timetable of July 31st.

Many thanks,

Lynn