<html><body><div style="color:#000; background-color:#fff; font-family:HelveticaNeue, Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, Lucida Grande, sans-serif;font-size:16px"><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_12597">Jennifer and All,</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_12598"><br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_10010" dir="ltr">I wrote comments direct at the dropbox regarding the Executive summary. Pardon me if I did it wrongly.</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_10011" dir="ltr">Below are my comments and I hope it can still be taken into consideration.</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_10012" dir="ltr"><br class="" id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_12641"></div><div class="" id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_15761" data-canvas-width="397.20041757007033" style="left: 86.1176px; top: 88.5611px; font-size: 13.2047px; font-family: sans-serif; transform: scaleX(1.01846);">"The ICG has concluded that the names proposal is complete </div><div class="" id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_15771" data-canvas-width="175.60226870183524" style="left: 473.934px; top: 118.702px; font-size: 13.2047px; font-family: sans-serif; transform: scaleX(1.01504);">on the condition that the...................., are concluded"</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_15772" dir="ltr"><br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_17416" dir="ltr">I am still struggling with this assertion of conclusion by the ICG as there are some incomplete/outstanding issues in the names proposal.viz <br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_20582" dir="ltr">The CCWG work stream 1 ongoing process mentioned in the section <br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_25050" dir="ltr">The CP-! issue Vs the Framework of Interpretation, RFC 1591 on ccTLD</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_25051" dir="ltr">The placehold regarding the iana.org issue, <br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_50099" dir="ltr">The incomplete SLE, etc<br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_25052" dir="ltr">Except I omitted some communications within the ICG, I feel the proposal is not complete without resolutions of these issues.</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_34543" dir="ltr">I did suggest or asked if the paragraph could be reworded to "noting" instead of "concluded" since the ICG would still have to make a determination on the completeness of the names proposal after the CCWG work S1 is accepted by the names community. ("<b id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_39644">At that point the ICG will make a final determination as to whether it considers the names proposal to be complete</b>")</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_39647" dir="ltr">However, if the ICG had concluded that the proposal is complete inspite of the oustandings, the WS1 of the CCWG, kindly clarify. <br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_13174" class="qtdSeparateBR"><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_39645">My second comment was on the workability section.</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_39646">Does the ICG not consider the layers of revews in the names proposal and those of the other two proposals a workability issue? I do see workability issue here and would request that this question be included in the matrix of questions. <br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_51092">"How will the layers or multiple reviews in the names proposal and those in the other two communities' proposals inpact on IFO's service delivery?</div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_52612"><br></div><div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_52613">Mary Uduma<br></div><br></div><div style="display: block;" id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_16411" class="yahoo_quoted"> <div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_16410" style="font-family: HelveticaNeue, Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, Lucida Grande, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;"> <div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_16409" style="font-family: HelveticaNeue, Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, Lucida Grande, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;"> <div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_16408" dir="ltr"> <font id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_19568" face="Arial" size="2"> On Friday, July 24, 2015 3:56 PM, Jennifer Chung <jen@icgsec.asia> wrote:<br> </font> </div> <br><br> <div id="yui_3_16_0_1_1437972049038_34046" class="y_msg_container"><div id="yiv7686417232"><style><!--
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I have drafted a slightly longer stand alone version of the summary sourced from the document. It summarizes process and conclusions. We may wish to add a closing section as it seems to end abruptly?<br><br>Happy for any thoughts.<br><br>Jennifer, I'm running out to a meeting, could you post the draft executive summary to drop box?<br><br>I also attach a first and incomplete draft of what had been a more summarized version, but think that the short version may be best suited to public material or a cover note. I attach it to see if any language could be useful elsewhere...<br><br>Joe</div><div><div class="yiv7686417232MsoNormal">On 7/23/2015 11:55 PM, Jennifer Chung wrote:</div></div><blockquote style="margin-top:5.0pt;margin-bottom:5.0pt;"><pre>Hi All,</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Attached and linked is v5-MI-LSA-PW-JC. Dropbox link:</pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="http://icgsec.asia/1JiezqA">http://icgsec.asia/1JiezqA</a> . This includes Paul's latest edits as well as</pre><pre>the requests from Manal below:</pre><pre> </pre><pre>"maybe secretariat could kindly assist in inserting the suggested</pre><pre>link(s)/footnote(s) (criteria against which the ICG assessed the proposals,</pre><pre>individually and collectively) and graph (showing the % of IANA transactions</pre><pre>(for 2014) per area) .."</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Two points relating to Manal/Lynn's request:</pre><pre>1. I have linked to the published ICG proposal finalization process</pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/iana-transition-assembly-finaliz">https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/iana-transition-assembly-finaliz</a></pre><pre>ation-24dec14-en.pdf. We have not published the individual assessment word</pre><pre>template (<a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="http://icgsec.asia/1el3lEA">http://icgsec.asia/1el3lEA</a>) on the ICG web site - I can do so if</pre><pre>we want to link to this in the ICG report.</pre><pre> </pre><pre>2. The data for the chart inserted was taken from pg. 53 of the IANA</pre><pre>presentation linked here:</pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="https://singapore52.icann.org/en/schedule/wed-iana/presentation-iana-departm">https://singapore52.icann.org/en/schedule/wed-iana/presentation-iana-departm</a></pre><pre>ent-11feb15-en.pdf. Lynn/Manal/all, please let me know if this is that is</pre><pre>envisaged.</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Lastly please note that the paragraph numbering is not correct in this file.</pre><pre>Once all the edits for the ICG report are in, the Secretariat will merge the</pre><pre>ICG report back into the correctly numbered v5.</pre><pre> </pre><pre>As always, the latest versions of all the public comment related documents</pre><pre>for your review is in this Dropbox folder: <a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2">http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2</a> </pre><pre> </pre><pre>Please let me know if you have any questions.</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Best Regards,</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Jennifer</pre><pre> </pre><pre> </pre><pre> </pre><pre>-----Original Message-----</pre><pre>From: Internal-cg [<a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a>] On Behalf Of Manal</pre><pre>Ismail</pre><pre>Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 9:07 PM</pre><pre>To: Lynn St.Amour <a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:lynn@lstamour.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:lynn@lstamour.org"><lynn@lstamour.org></a>; <a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a></pre><pre>Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Many thanks Lynn for the suggested edits and for your comments ..</pre><pre>Following your email, I would also urge colleagues to review and provide</pre><pre>feedback by Friday in order to meet our public comment period dates .. </pre><pre> </pre><pre>Meanwhile, for the sake of time, maybe the secretariat could kindly assist</pre><pre>in inserting the suggested link(s)/footnote(s) (criteria against which the</pre><pre>ICG assessed the proposals, individually and collectively) and graph</pre><pre>(showing the % of IANA transactions (for 2014) per area) ..</pre><pre> </pre><pre>I also believe we need to conclude on the order of the proposals .. Although</pre><pre>it is not a substantial change it would still require a thorough review and</pre><pre>several edits throughout the document (ICG report, sections' headers, ...)</pre><pre>..</pre><pre> </pre><pre>I had a few questions throughout the report and hope colleagues would review</pre><pre>and provide further guidance ..</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Finally, some parts of the text (highlighted in blue to my best) reflect the</pre><pre>current status of the accountability proposal (ongoing discussions) which</pre><pre>won't be the case (accountability proposal finalized and put out for public</pre><pre>comments too) by the time the combined transition proposal is out for public</pre><pre>comment .. Should such parts be changed to reflect the status of the</pre><pre>accountability proposal at the time of the public comment period?</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Looking forward to receiving your input/feedback/suggestions/comments ..</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Kind Regards</pre><pre>--Manal</pre><pre> </pre><pre>-----Original Message-----</pre><pre>From: Internal-cg [<a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a>] On Behalf Of Lynn</pre><pre>St.Amour</pre><pre>Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 6:54 PM</pre><pre>To: <a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a></pre><pre>Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Again, thanks much Manal,</pre><pre> </pre><pre>To-date, I reviewed this through the ICG report section (only), and made</pre><pre>some edits to try and convey why the report was combined in this way. I</pre><pre>would appreciate it if folks could review it carefully, as I believe it is a</pre><pre>critical point (and sensitive). And, some of it may be better suited to the</pre><pre>Exec. Summary. </pre><pre> </pre><pre>Joe, I believe you had volunteered to send some draft text re the Exec.</pre><pre>summary. If this is correct, can I do anything to help? If I have it</pre><pre>wrong, I will look up the minutes (can't do that just now though,</pre><pre>unfortunately).</pre><pre> </pre><pre>And, could those individuals who have been participating in the CWG -</pre><pre>Stewardship and the CCWG efforts, please review the appropriate sections to</pre><pre>ensure they reflect the latest positions?</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Finally, we should aim to have all comments on this and the public web-site</pre><pre>no later than this Friday, so that we can review the "very near final"</pre><pre>drafts of this on Monday, in order to meet our public comment period</pre><pre>timetable of July 31st.</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Many thanks,</pre><pre> </pre><pre>Lynn</pre><pre> </pre><pre>_______________________________________________</pre><pre>Internal-cg mailing list</pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org">Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org</a></pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org">http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org</a></pre><div class="yiv7686417232MsoNormal"><br><br><br></div><pre>_______________________________________________</pre><pre>Internal-cg mailing list</pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" ymailto="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org">Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org</a></pre><pre><a rel="nofollow" target="_blank" href="http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org">http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org</a></pre></blockquote><div class="yiv7686417232MsoNormal"> </div></div></div></div><br>_______________________________________________<br>Internal-cg mailing list<br><a ymailto="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org" href="mailto:Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org">Internal-cg@mm.ianacg.org</a><br><a href="http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org" target="_blank">http://mm.ianacg.org/mailman/listinfo/internal-cg_ianacg.org</a><br><br><br></div> </div> </div> </div></div></body></html>