<div dir="ltr"><div>Dear All,</div><div>I am currently fully involved in CCWG activities to end releasing the Second Proposal for public comment .</div><div>I attend several call per day and fully represent ICG in order that all issue relating to CWG Inan Stewardship be correctly addressed</div><div>There are some pending issues yet to n be finalized in order that ICG proposal be sufficientléy clear .</div><div>I am travelling to Seoul ,South Korea from 25 July to 03 August</div><div>My mobile phone is not operational during this period</div><div>As soon as I arrived in Hilton South Korea I will inform Jennifer of the number to be dialed during this period</div><div>Regards</div><div>Kavouss </div></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">2015-07-24 18:43 GMT+02:00 Lynn St.Amour <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:Lynn@lstamour.org" target="_blank">Lynn@lstamour.org</a>></span>:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">Thanks again Joe,<br>
<br>
after a quick read, I think this is quite good. It pulls some of the text from the ICG review section (and it fits well here), so we may need to edit that section a bit. I will review again later and attempt to add some closing text per your request.<br>
<br>
Also hope to see some other reviewers as well.<br>
<br>
Best,<br>
<br>
Lynn<br>
<br>
<span><br>
On Jul 24, 2015, at 9:29 AM, joseph alhadeff <<a href="mailto:joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com">joseph.alhadeff@oracle.com</a>> wrote:<br>
<br>
</span><span>> Colleagues:<br>
><br>
> I attach a proposed executive summary. I have drafted a slightly longer stand alone version of the summary sourced from the document. It summarizes process and conclusions. We may wish to add a closing section as it seems to end abruptly?<br>
><br>
> Happy for any thoughts.<br>
><br>
> Jennifer, I'm running out to a meeting, could you post the draft executive summary to drop box?<br>
><br>
> I also attach a first and incomplete draft of what had been a more summarized version, but think that the short version may be best suited to public material or a cover note. I attach it to see if any language could be useful elsewhere...<br>
><br>
> Joe<br>
><br>
> On 7/23/2015 11:55 PM, Jennifer Chung wrote:<br>
>> Hi All,<br>
>><br>
>> Attached and linked is v5-MI-LSA-PW-JC. Dropbox link:<br>
>><br>
>> <a href="http://icgsec.asia/1JiezqA" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">http://icgsec.asia/1JiezqA</a><br>
</span><span>>> . This includes Paul's latest edits as well as<br>
>> the requests from Manal below:<br>
>><br>
>> "maybe secretariat could kindly assist in inserting the suggested<br>
>> link(s)/footnote(s) (criteria against which the ICG assessed the proposals,<br>
>> individually and collectively) and graph (showing the % of IANA transactions<br>
>> (for 2014) per area) .."<br>
>><br>
>> Two points relating to Manal/Lynn's request:<br>
>> 1. I have linked to the published ICG proposal finalization process<br>
>><br>
>> <a href="https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/iana-transition-assembly-finaliz" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">https://www.icann.org/en/system/files/files/iana-transition-assembly-finaliz</a><br>
>><br>
</span><span>>> ation-24dec14-en.pdf. We have not published the individual assessment word<br>
>> template (<br>
>> <a href="http://icgsec.asia/1el3lEA" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">http://icgsec.asia/1el3lEA</a><br>
</span><span>>> ) on the ICG web site - I can do so if<br>
>> we want to link to this in the ICG report.<br>
>><br>
>> 2. The data for the chart inserted was taken from pg. 53 of the IANA<br>
>> presentation linked here:<br>
>><br>
>> <a href="https://singapore52.icann.org/en/schedule/wed-iana/presentation-iana-departm" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">https://singapore52.icann.org/en/schedule/wed-iana/presentation-iana-departm</a><br>
>><br>
</span><span>>> ent-11feb15-en.pdf. Lynn/Manal/all, please let me know if this is that is<br>
>> envisaged.<br>
>><br>
>> Lastly please note that the paragraph numbering is not correct in this file.<br>
>> Once all the edits for the ICG report are in, the Secretariat will merge the<br>
>> ICG report back into the correctly numbered v5.<br>
>><br>
>> As always, the latest versions of all the public comment related documents<br>
>> for your review is in this Dropbox folder:<br>
>> <a href="http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2</a><br>
>><br>
>><br>
</span><span>>> Please let me know if you have any questions.<br>
>><br>
>> Best Regards,<br>
>><br>
>> Jennifer<br>
>><br>
>><br>
>><br>
>> -----Original Message-----<br>
>> From: Internal-cg [<br>
>> mailto:<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a><br>
</span><span>>> ] On Behalf Of Manal<br>
>> Ismail<br>
>> Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 9:07 PM<br>
>> To: Lynn St.Amour<br>
</span><div><div class="h5">>> <<a href="mailto:lynn@lstamour.org">lynn@lstamour.org</a>>; <a href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a><br>
>><br>
>> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5<br>
>><br>
>> Many thanks Lynn for the suggested edits and for your comments ..<br>
>> Following your email, I would also urge colleagues to review and provide<br>
>> feedback by Friday in order to meet our public comment period dates ..<br>
>><br>
>> Meanwhile, for the sake of time, maybe the secretariat could kindly assist<br>
>> in inserting the suggested link(s)/footnote(s) (criteria against which the<br>
>> ICG assessed the proposals, individually and collectively) and graph<br>
>> (showing the % of IANA transactions (for 2014) per area) ..<br>
>><br>
>> I also believe we need to conclude on the order of the proposals .. Although<br>
>> it is not a substantial change it would still require a thorough review and<br>
>> several edits throughout the document (ICG report, sections' headers, ...)<br>
>> ..<br>
>><br>
>> I had a few questions throughout the report and hope colleagues would review<br>
>> and provide further guidance ..<br>
>><br>
>> Finally, some parts of the text (highlighted in blue to my best) reflect the<br>
>> current status of the accountability proposal (ongoing discussions) which<br>
>> won't be the case (accountability proposal finalized and put out for public<br>
>> comments too) by the time the combined transition proposal is out for public<br>
>> comment .. Should such parts be changed to reflect the status of the<br>
>> accountability proposal at the time of the public comment period?<br>
>><br>
>> Looking forward to receiving your input/feedback/suggestions/comments ..<br>
>><br>
>> Kind Regards<br>
>> --Manal<br>
>><br>
>> -----Original Message-----<br>
>> From: Internal-cg [<br>
>> mailto:<a href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a><br>
</div></div><span>>> ] On Behalf Of Lynn<br>
>> St.Amour<br>
>> Sent: Thursday, July 23, 2015 6:54 PM<br>
>> To:<br>
</span><div><div class="h5">>> <a href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a><br>
>><br>
>> Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] Latest version of the combined proposal - v5<br>
>><br>
>> Again, thanks much Manal,<br>
>><br>
>> To-date, I reviewed this through the ICG report section (only), and made<br>
>> some edits to try and convey why the report was combined in this way. I<br>
>> would appreciate it if folks could review it carefully, as I believe it is a<br>
>> critical point (and sensitive). And, some of it may be better suited to the<br>
>> Exec. Summary.<br>
>><br>
>> Joe, I believe you had volunteered to send some draft text re the Exec.<br>
>> summary. If this is correct, can I do anything to help? If I have it<br>
>> wrong, I will look up the minutes (can't do that just now though,<br>
>> unfortunately).<br>
>><br>
>> And, could those individuals who have been participating in the CWG -<br>
>> Stewardship and the CCWG efforts, please review the appropriate sections to<br>
>> ensure they reflect the latest positions?<br>
>><br>
>> Finally, we should aim to have all comments on this and the public web-site<br>
>> no later than this Friday, so that we can review the "very near final"<br>
>> drafts of this on Monday, in order to meet our public comment period<br>
>> timetable of July 31st.<br>
>><br>
>> Many thanks,<br>
>><br>
>> Lynn<br>
>><br>
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