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Colleagues:<br>
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As I read this material, I think we have most of the necessary
elements, but or the non-initiated the flow might be confusing. I
have added a couple of comments on where flow could be improved. I
have also suggested the inclusion of a diagram.<br>
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Unfortunately I can't engage in detailed drafting on this till
Monday, but would be happy to if that is within the viable
time-frame.<br>
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Joe<br>
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<div class="moz-cite-prefix">On 7/22/2015 9:27 AM, Manal Ismail
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<pre wrap="">Thanks Jennifer ..
Thanks Lynn ..
Please find attached and on Dropbox a few remarks marked in track changes ..
Kind Regards
--Manal
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From: Internal-cg [<a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a>] On Behalf Of Jennifer Chung
Sent: Tuesday, July 21, 2015 6:21 PM
To: 'Lynn St.Amour'; <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a>
Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] public comment web page v2
Hi All,
Please find the public comment web page v3 (final section links added, public comment date inserted) attached and linked below:
Dropbox link to v3: <a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="http://icgsec.asia/1RN2v60">http://icgsec.asia/1RN2v60</a>
All previous versions of this document have been preserved and moved to a different Dropbox subfolder called 'Web page materials' (CoordinationGroup > Web page materials): <a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="http://icgsec.asia/1MFLRyE">http://icgsec.asia/1MFLRyE</a>
All the latest versions of all materials for the ICG public comment period launch is available here for your review (CoordinationGroup > Public
Comment): <a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2">http://icgsec.asia/1OfxHW2</a>
Please let me know if you have any questions.
Best Regards,
Jennifer
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From: Internal-cg [<a class="moz-txt-link-freetext" href="mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org">mailto:internal-cg-bounces@ianacg.org</a>] On Behalf Of Lynn St.Amour
Sent: Tuesday, July 21, 2015 11:45 AM
To: <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:internal-cg@ianacg.org">internal-cg@ianacg.org</a>
Subject: Re: [Internal-cg] public comment web page v2
Hello everyone,
just trying to move this forward in our chair's absence.
Could the secretariat include relevant links (per the request below) and ensure the latest is posted on dropbox.
ICG members, could we have any remaining comments on this by this Friday 24th July? I will then incorporate the feedback and turn it around for final approval and posting.
Must all be DONE by July 29th for start of public comment period,
Best,
Lynn
On Jul 12, 2015, at 1:54 AM, Alissa Cooper <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:alissa@cooperw.in"><alissa@cooperw.in></a> wrote:
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I've updated the public comment web page material [1] based on our
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Please review and provide your feedback. We will need to finalize this
by
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I'm hoping that Lynn will be able to shepherd the process of
incorporating
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Secretariat: If you could gather the links that should go in the final
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Thanks,
Alissa
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